Final Music Video

I have now made the alterations stated in the previous post. 
0:36 - 0:51 have been edited. The girls close up eyes have been changed to a clip where they look sadder and a transition has been added to make the focus on the eyes smoother. I have also changed the two split screens so they no longer look stretched.
Also, 1:38 - 1:39 now has a transition as before you could notice an ever so slight jolt in the camera position (can't understand this as it was on a tripod...) so I added the effect as it fits with the effects that are around the same time and it's a nice soft one that flows well.

Final draft...

Here is my completed draft of my music video:





Parts of the video that I think are particularly strong and weak are:


Strengths

• The use of split screens. I think they're generally quite effective, especially the one in which they're separated but then come together.
• Some of the night clips, they're not too dark which was an initial concern but I think they've turned out fairly well.
• Effects. I think I've used the effects fairly well and appropriately. Especially when the streetlight gets brighter and then fades out again.
• The cliffhanger. I like how the ending has been left on a cliffhanger, I know the first few people I showed this video to all asked 'was that him?' at the end which was my intention.

Weaknesses

• Too much walking around. I can't really do much about this now because I had a limited time frame in which to re-film but I can't shake the feeling it just looks like a girl walking around some fields.
• Acting. I'm now going to play the part of the terrible friend but I do feel as if the acting in this video isn't great... I used a real couple to try and capture real emotions but I think that they felt slightly awkward about filming when it came to it and those emotions didn't really prevail in front of the camera. I especially don't like the close up of the female characters face as it looks as if she's about to start laughing... which she was but I tried to pick clips in which she wasn't but it didn't work, obviously!
• No change of costume. I know this is getting really picky now but I don't like how they're wearing the same thing in the present and flashbacks... it gives it a lesser sense of realism. I don't want to keep blaming the shortened time period in which to film but in all honesty it did kind of effect what I was able and unable to do as a lot of it had to be filmed in bulk and costume changes weren't really able to happen.
• Inside shots, they look a bit simplistic and boring and like they've just been filmed one after the other... which they were but I was hoping it wouldn't be obvious.
• The second chorus. 'Under Streetlights, on long car rides...'. The visuals show EXACTLY this and I think it's a bit obvious and doesn't look quite right.
• Stretched split screens at around 00:43 seconds. I'm going to try and fix this though.

So, here is the survey for my video:

http://www.surveymonkey.com/s/32VCHKB

I'm hoping to get as many responses as possible to gain a wide range of feedback. I am going to email Brooke and ask if she'd mind distributing it on her Facebook page or somewhere where I can target her fans and try and get their responses also.

Footage so far...

This is the footage Katherine & I have captured so far and feel is going to work:





We feel we will need to shoot more footage, especially of Molly, and also some of inside shots so we can create the memory scenes we were hoping to.
We found that when we filmed last time it got dark a lot sooner than we had expected so we found ourselves using night-vision just so we could see what was happening. We found the footage was very green so then had to correct the colour of a lot of footage.
We've made quite a promising start though.